Memo

TO: MRS.MOODY

FROM: COLTON KELLER

DATE: 9/15/09


After having Seth evaluate my paper, I noticed many areas of my paper I could improve on. In my introduction I have good details he said, so I plan on extending those details throughout the rest of my memoir. He also liked my use of dialogue so I plan on using more of that in my memoir too. The one area he thought I should add to was about how I felt when I was at the game with my grandmother. So I will try to go back into the introduction and add some more emotional words about how I was feeling that day. Overall I like how I wrote the introduction so I will try to carry out those writing strategies throughout the rest of my paper.
The introduction went well but finishing the paper is far from done. I want to break up my paper into three sections. The first is about the baseball games I used to go to with her (the introduction). I am almost done with this part but I just need to add more details about the rest of the baseball game and how that day ended. After I am finished with that I want to write a section of the memoir about her passing. I want to describe where I was, how old I was, and how hurt I was when she passed away. My feelings in the aftermath of her death will support the first section of the memoir in showing how strong our relationship was. And finally I would like to end the memoir by describing how my life is today without her. I want to describe how she still has a great impact on me today, and how she still remains in my thoughts and prayers everyday even after she has been gone almost seven years.